Legion
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Girl? I've never heard of that Pokemon
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Post by Legion on Nov 22, 2015 3:05:26 GMT
You can't just copy and paste the beginning of Fallout 4 man...
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Themoddedman
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Can't stand the sight of your own blood?
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Post by Themoddedman on Nov 22, 2015 3:21:49 GMT
You can't just copy and paste the beginning of Fallout 4 man... Thought that too. Lol. |
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Post by kornisvegetable on Nov 22, 2015 3:30:29 GMT
Fallout 4 spoilers! Oh no!
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Post by angryvaultboy on Nov 22, 2015 3:34:15 GMT
You can't just copy and paste the beginning of Fallout 4 man... I only based it off of the beginning, if I had "copy and pasted" it. I would've been like "David had a wife, and a child. When the nuclear detonations began, he rushed them both over to their assigned vault. (Vault 111). But, if you wanna look at it that way. Be my guest.  |
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Post by angryvaultboy on Nov 22, 2015 3:34:36 GMT
Fallout 4 spoilers! Oh no!  |
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Themoddedman
New Member
Can't stand the sight of your own blood?
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Post by Themoddedman on Nov 22, 2015 4:46:12 GMT
I'ma give it a +Support. You seem very intelligent and capable of good grammar and RP; your backstory seemed a bit copied, but it is heavily outweighed by other factors that make this application certainly acceptable.
P.S. I put bad (-support) in the vote, because I got mixed up with apps through all my fowards and backwards. Count my -support as a +support.
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Post by angryvaultboy on Nov 22, 2015 4:50:42 GMT
I'ma give it a +Support. You seem very intelligent and capable of good grammar and RP; your backstory seemed a bit copied, but it is heavily outweighed by other factors that make this application certainly acceptable. P.S. I put bad (-support) in the vote, because I got mixed up with apps through all my fowards and backwards. Count my -support as a +support. Thanks, bro! I appreciate the support! |
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Post by kornisvegetable on Nov 22, 2015 4:50:58 GMT
Even though the backstory seems like a slight copy and paste, the application in general was quite good and I enjoyed reading it. + Support.
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Legion
New Member
Girl? I've never heard of that Pokemon
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Post by Legion on Nov 22, 2015 4:53:36 GMT
Going to say Neutral to +Support
Pros:
Decent Passive and Action RP examples.
Grammar and Spelling were decent
We need merchants.
Cons:
Story was not a complete direct copy and paste but was an edited form of the Fallout 4 opening sequence.
Seems to barely fit the requirements of 4 paragraphs as well as your first paragraph needing to be put together rather than split in the weird fashion that it is.
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Post by angryvaultboy on Nov 22, 2015 6:24:46 GMT
Going to say Neutral to +SupportPros:
Decent Passive and Action RP examples.
Grammar and Spelling were decent
We need merchants.
Cons:
Story was not a complete direct copy and paste but was an edited form of the Fallout 4 opening sequence.
Seems to barely fit the requirements of 4 paragraphs as well as your first paragraph needing to be put together rather than split in the weird fashion that it is.I appreciate the feedback, thanks! |
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Post by plutosworld on Nov 22, 2015 23:05:01 GMT
ACCEPTED - You could have made a better story but other then that I don't see any problem with the application.
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